Shadowdog posted a comment on Thursday 7th July 2016 3:35am

I read the story you based the idea off of I think. I tend to like this variety of short better. Less crazy overall and much closer to believable. I guess I somewhat Feel sympathy for Ginny, but I hardly ever find a fic where I care so that's proportionally quite large. Love your writing!

gara5289 posted a comment on Friday 23rd November 2012 3:28pm

Really enjoyed all the proposal rejections. And i agree, poor Ginny.

gara5289 posted a comment on Friday 23rd November 2012 3:17pm

I like the adaptation though i do think the turn around from her dating Terry to essentially being betrothed was a little quick. Literally, it was like 500 words. You'd think for her reputation if nothing else they'd slow it down a bit.

dfpepper posted a comment on Tuesday 24th January 2012 1:58pm

This was a great short story, and I loved the way you handled the rejections.
While Daphne's aggressive approach was not unexpected, I thought that Susan's bearing of some cleavage was a funny moment.

Thanks for all of your efforts.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Friday 13th January 2012 12:23pm

Yeah, I can sympathize with this Ginny as, despite her best and strongest efforts, she still didn't "land" Harry. I was amused by Daphne Greeengrass' efforts and her reaction when she found out he couldn't be mainipulated that way (had to be rather a surprise given what we know about most of the wizards in their year in Slytherin).

Patches posted a comment on Wednesday 11th January 2012 3:42am

This is a great little story. I like the way Harry and Hermione tried to spare the feelings of all the other people involved in the marriage contract business beginning with Terry. He took it very well. Daphne was a surprise at how incensed she was about Harry's decision. She knew Harry the least and expected to win out over all his other friends that were girls. Very well done. I liked the ending with the engagement and the elder Granger parents reactions. Thanks for writing. I look forward to more little stories like this. pms

Khil posted a comment on Monday 9th January 2012 11:38am

Um, typically sappy, naive, turnaround to H/Hr. Pleasant to read if you're down. Just for the humanity, please stop the moralizing about sexuality! This part of your stories seems be actually a monologue adressed to your reader than to Harry. The most infuriating quality of your works, Bobmins and Dad9.

jules3677 posted a comment on Saturday 7th January 2012 8:18pm

Lovely gentle story. Your Neville was a good character. Thankyou for a nice read

Chiyo posted a comment on Saturday 7th January 2012 8:08pm

"Play your cards right..." lol

Bob Officer posted a comment on Wednesday 4th January 2012 11:24pm

Excellent story line and View. Was this a one Shot, I would like to see the follow-ups to the this last scene and the world finds out.

One follow chapter please. sort of as the dust settles from the whirl-wind romance.

Kathleen posted a comment on Wednesday 4th January 2012 11:28am

Nicely done! I was so wrapped up in the story I totally forgot about the contracts until they appeared. :)

gadriam posted a comment on Wednesday 4th January 2012 7:28am

Most entertaining, and very real-feeling Harry. I really enjoy this more low-keyed storytelling, without the grand gestures and extremes one can find in the inspirational fic. Well, i love that one too, though. What i find really great in your take, is the stupidity and stubbornness of Hermione. She's a planner in the extreme, and she sticks to her plans. In this case she made a plan as a girl, and tried to follow through as a young woman but what makes sense to a girl tends to be rather stupid for a woman. As soon as she was shaken out of her girly plan, the woman got it almost immediately. This story can really stand to be quite a few chapters longer, but it's your world. You own it, and i just enjoy peeking in..=)

May Robert Lind in Kramfors bless your keyboard.

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Rexnos posted a comment on Wednesday 4th January 2012 2:38am

I like pieces of it more than Clell's and other's less. In both cases, it's well written and solid grammar wise. The imagery is pretty decent as well.

I agree that having both Ron and Hermione suddenly abandon Harry was more than a bit of a stretch. Ron did his jealous thing more often than he should, but Hermione was always behind Harry, through thick and thin. I always considered Marriage Contracts to be a complete AU. It was inconceivable to think that Hermione would spontaneously ignore her best and first friend.

On the other hand, I feel like you went a bit overboard. I can give you the whole separation bringing two people closer together thing. Hermione and Harry's sudden separation could easily show them how much they really mean to one another. However, I really doubt that the two of them would immediately jump to physical closeness. I don't remember canon Harry and Hermione ever being physically demonstrative beyond end of year hugs. Even if this is a bit AU and they're both touchy-feely (preposterous considering Harry's upbringing), I can't see either of them being comfortable with anything beyond kissing. And then they take it a step farther and start talking betrothal and marriage not ten seconds from their first kiss? That's just zero to a hundred in ten seconds flat.

Anyway, regardless of my personal misgivings, it's your story. I may not think the characters are particularly realistic, but it's still well written and interesting. Doubtless I'll read the second installment as well.

Later,
Rex

chuckmcdaniels posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2012 7:08pm

I have to admit that I wasn't sure about this at the start (I guess I've always been an H/Hr purist, and if they weren't together, at least Hermione was not dating anyone else). But, the fairly small amount of description of what Terry & Hermione were doing was very sweet and well written.

You mentioned in your initial author's note that this was just a two-chapter story, so I guess part two will go over the betrothal contracts, and the reaction of folks around to Harry & Hermione being together?

I feel almost like I've seen something like that part (Harry refusing a bunch of betrothal contracts) before, but I'm looking forward to your take on it, as it's easy to see the care you take in your stories!

nobodez posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2012 10:56am

Fun story, and since you said it was two chapters, I'm looking forward to the next/final installment.

I too enjoyed Clell's story, but I'm not quite as deep a Harmony shipper as some, so I found it quite enjoyable (especially the mindf--k of Dumbles).

Patches posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2012 2:20am

This is a great beginning to this story. I love the way that Hermione finally figured out her own feelings after finally seeing Harry's feelings by thinking about her description of love. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. pms

Wolfric posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2012 11:51pm

Good story. Though it seems like I have read it before. Thanks for writing. W.

ProfessorBinns posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2012 11:45pm

A pleasant, and plausible, diversion. I think it would also work as the blueprint for a more drawn-out realization. Thanks, and I look forward to ch. 2.

noylj posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2012 11:41pm

Very nice.
Hope Harry leaves MoRon in the dust.
Thanks for writing.